A cute story. I honestly chuckled at a few parts (like Trey's afro being set on fire and the "just look at the pretty pictures" comment). I'm interested how Eyrton is so sure it's Enzo that kidnapped her. Is he right? Is it just a guess out of pure jealousy or resentment? Are Jesse and Enzo secretly dating and wanted to run off for some privacy? Or not, will there be some kind of romantic tension between the two in the futre?
My only constructive crit is the artist could work a little on doing female bodies (the anatomy is a little off at times). Don't get me wrong, anatomy isn't always easy.