He said punctuation, not spelling. As in full stops and commas, you have a run-on sentence there that makes it a chore to read.
Not having a go, just saying that many people will give up if a post is worded in a difficult way. You'll maximise your responses if you make the extra effort.
And it's generally best to avoid clan names in presets, as when you link them in forums the clan's name takes its default red link and messes up the preset URL. Still clickable if there are any non clan name words, though (purple links).
Anyway... the deck:
Why have you imbalanced this with a 3/4 split when you could use Spiaghi
in place of Veenyle? Not only is he a better DR, but he has more power and more chance of an active bonus in a 4/4 split.
The deck is ok, but you're lacking some pretty powerful staples.
and Edd, for example. Also cards like Otakool
If I were you, and if you can afford it, I'd make the following changes:
If you can't afford Gil
will replace him well enough.