Ok deck. I would personally change Cley to Chiara. You could also try changing Carter to Tomas and Manfred to Lorna.
Deleting my long, thought out comment is insulting to me. I spent about 10 minutes writing that, and explaining why. You have been blacklisted.
The reason it was deleted was because I in turn found it offensive. So the next time you spend valuable time writing a "well thought out review" take into account if it is truly helpful or simply insulting in itself. I have said once before that critique is good, but to make sure you do it right, else it just becomes useless. On another note, if you don't care for how someone is to feel towards your response then post it here, where there can be no fear of having it deleted.